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容易混淆的词汇经常会使我们的文章不够有魅力，有的词虽然意思相同，但他们表达同一个意思的程度是不同的;有的英语单词的汉语意思相同，但他们所限定修饰的词、使用的范围或者连接的成分是不同的;有的单词的文体风格不同，有正式和非正式之分。

下面我们来看几个例子：

1、Original: …people may attend a university or college for various reasons...

　　Revised: …people attend university or college for a multitude of reasons...

　　此处将various改为短语a multitude of更为正式，体现人们读大学的原因很多。

　　2、Original: Bill Gates gives a definite answer that college education does count.

　　Revised: Bill Gates gave a definitive answer: college education does count.

　　Definite意思是“明确的”、“一定的”，指意思明确，不会误解;definitive也是“明确”的意思，但往往指“权威性、最后决定的”。此话出自比尔·盖茨之口，体现权威性，故将definite改为definitive。

3、Original: They can foster their interests in some fields to make life more colorful and meaningful.

Revised: They can even pick up hobbies to make life more colorful and enjoyable.

　　Foster their interests是“培养兴趣”，此处用pick up hobbies(开始各种各样的兴趣)更为合适;不同的兴趣是我们生活的调味剂，使我们的生活多姿多彩，乐趣无穷，把meaningful换成enjoyable，与colorful搭配更合适。

　　4、Original: The kinds of education that we got on school are formal and intense ones...

　　Revised: The kinds of education that we receive at school is formal and of tentimes very intense.

　　不必用kinds of education，直接用education(教育)即可;“受教育”不同get，改为receive;“在学校”不必用at school;把one去掉，用oftentimes very intense指出学校教育常常是非常严格的。

　　5、Original: Needless to say, more employment means more income and less idle life, so that people can enjoy a better life and make investment in their future.

　　Revised: Needless to say, more employment means income and less idle time, so that people can enjoy a better life and invest in their own futures.

　　把idle life改为idle time更为合适，表示“闲散时间”;make investment可改为动词invest，与and前的动词enjoy词性一致;人们各自有自己的未来，故将in their future改为in their own futures。

延伸阅读：

托福写作技巧——4个要领

托福写作高分必知——虚拟语气的使用（一）

托福写作高分必知——虚拟语气的使用（二）

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