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1.       用词不当

原：You will be dangerous if you keep moving without a clear view of the whole picture.

改：You will be in danger if you keep moving without a clear view of the whole picture.

评：dangerous表示所修饰的对象是“带来危险的，有危险性的”，而be in danger才是“身处险境”的意思。到底谁才是威胁呢?

原：Firstly, the job, providing the opportunity for students to utilize what they learned in class, might effect their further development.

改：Firstly, the job, providing the opportunity for students to utilize what they learned in class, might affect their further development.

评：模样长得像，意思可不同了。这里想用动词affect表示“影响”，却误写为名词effect“效果”，一字千里啊!

2. 搭配错误

　　原：Nowadays, people are crazy pursuing to be excellent.

　　改：Nowadays, people are crazy about excellence.

　　评：这位同学显然记错了be crazy about sth. 这个用法，写出来的句子自然会出问题啦。

　　原：Besides, public speech can effectively increase your communication skills, which facilitate your salesman career.

　　改：Besides, public speech can effectively improve your communication skills, which facilitate your salesman career.

　　评：此处是一个明显的动宾搭配错误。“提高……技巧”应该是improve the skills，而不是increase the skills.

3.词性错位

　　原：I will forget my sad and pressure from the work and the study.

　　改：I will forget my sadness and pressure from work and study.

　　评：sad是形容词，而这里明显需要一个名词，应该是sadness。

　　原：Although making money is a priority for most people, spending time with the family is equal significant.

　　改： …, spending time with the family is equally significant.

　　评：形容词significant前需要用副词来修饰，所以equal